That first section blew me away. There is no way I could create that. That paragraph has such an impact it keeps the reader looking for more. And then the 'more' has the goods to back up the beginning. I'd hire me in a second ;-)
I proofread as requested and did find a few items to discuss. I hope I used the tracking as you requested, that is a feature of Word I rarely use. If, in your experience, discussing the changes over the phone while we are both looking is a good idea, please call me at ANY time at 111-444-4444 and I will be ready right then.
Thank you again so much and I hope to hear from you soon.